SWAN SONG - Brightwood

If I did something as good as this when I was 17... Really good job! I like most of the shots, the color grading, and most of all the spirit of how you did it. You get 5 cows for that...This being a contest however, I will rate this in the context. I agree the cut needs some more work, but that is not my biggest issue. I feel that the story and treatment is clean but it does not break barriers. Work more on the IDEA, go crazy, surprise the viewers by doing the un-expected. A bit more dynamic camera work at the end would have been better. So, in this contest, I give this work 4 cows.

The quality of your shots is excellent - The color treatment is appropriate and effective - You have a lot of talent - here is why I wouldn't give it a 5 - It's the cut - for instance; @3:09 when you come back from the interlude you almost get it right for my taste - you cut to the drummer because that is undeniably where we as the veiwer/listener go mentally based on the dynamics of the song - Look at this video Bird of Feather @3:03 - I'm not saying do it just like that - I'm saying that is the money shot so to speak - There is such a strong musical cue that it demands to be aknowledged - there are several moments in the video that for my taste share that same quality that you missed @ :51 is a place I noted on first view and just in general the shots of the musicians seemed random as opposed to using musical dynamics to emphasize things - 1:21 is another spot. You got great performances out of your actors - nice casting - 1:44 very eerie - I would have cut to the girl @2:39 - some more revealing moment having to do with the story - it's very open ended and very likely that's what you wanted - so I'm just expressing a subjective opinion - Awesome location, and all in all it's really good all things considered.

What a wonderful video. I really like the shot selection.