BLACK COFFIN - His Orchestra

This had a pretty cabaret-style feel to it. But the production values were just a little too low to really sink into as a viewer. With the seams on the floor you should have framed the start of your dolly-back higher. Things like that. The lighting was not very interesting and set design needed some extra flares in the background.

Okay - this is a great effort and my over all impression can be summed up in one word "almost". You have a solid artistic concept - to me it's "almost" saying - Sophistication - Elegance - Sexy - the reason I say almost is because of tiny details that when I as a third party viewer see them they subtract from that impression - for instance; the little fastner on the umbrellas should have been removed and the fact that the umbrellas are wrinkly - the floor - the way you have the back drop little hightlights the seams in the floor and that subracts from the "elegance" - It's a good song - you did achieve a lot - I'm not privy to your budget - but I'm guessing you had to pay your dancers (whom) I would have highlited more - I like the "one man band" at 1:44 - I thought the cuts were a bit jumpy for this piece. Umm - the lead singer is very appealing in a John Mayer kinda way - ultimately my scoring isn't going to make or break you in this contest - I think you did a really good job but I'm scoring it a 4 - rock on!

With a sound that is quite fresh yet reminiscent of Harry Nilsson at times, this is a wonderful work and your use of lighting and color elements is quite effective. I really liked it and appreciated the flow and the ambiance you created. Good work.